http://morganstuart.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] morganstuart.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] machshefa 2011-10-10 10:42 am (UTC)

This is absolutely stunning. Beautifully crafted.

You can almost hear him now if you listen closely. If you close your eyes. His breath, ragged, his footsteps pounding the tile as he paces, unmoored because of what you did, what you offered.

Yes, yes, yes.

The final line just gutted me. I love how you ramp up the tension and how this one sentence says it all at the last. Perfection. *standing ovation*

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